恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；若增加一些从句的使用，文章会更不错；文中用词稍显贫乏，单词拼写还要加强；请注意分段。
The traffic problem in the cities is very heavy.there are many reasons result the traffic problem. First of all,the road system itself has some problems,so the road results the traffic. secondly,there are more and more private cars in the cities, so the traffic problems become heavier and heavier. In order to solve traffic problems,the goverment should plan well about the road system,and they should encourage citizens to take buses rather than cars.
