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The earth is our home, we should protect it.So I always walk or ride a bike to school instead of taking my father's car. I will try to use recycled things and I never forget to turn off the lights when I leave the classroom. I think it's our duty to help protect our environment.And even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment.I suggest we should use every piece of paper on both sides. And we'd better not spend much money on expensive clothes. If everyone does something for the environment, our city will become more and more beautiful.
