Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文中词汇使用较丰富恰当，但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升；文中使用了简单的连接词和过渡词；作者应适量增加从句的使用量。
Judging from the table, we can see that people's income increases along with their education levels. Above all，the average college graduates earn much more than the typical high-school graduates. The fact revealed by these data is obvious: a degree does bring distinctive financial benefits to its holders. But is it true that a degree alone can ensure a bright future? I don't think so because, on the one hand, the financial value of high education depends heavily on what skills graduates can gain from it instead of the degree itself. After all, an employer only pays for your ability and performance, not for your certificate. On the other hand, the most valuable bless high education brings to graduates is the ability to learn quickly and efficiently. People received more education tend to keep lifelong learning habits after their graduation, which would help them gain more opportunities in their career path. In conclusion, what accounts for education pays is not the degree alone, but the graduate's ability and learning habit.
