文章在句法方面做的很棒，从句和复杂句的使用不错；文中词汇较灵活，但要注意积累学术词汇，拼写错误也要注意；全文结构较为严谨，应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
The Accident It is terrible for me to see an accident at 11:20 today. As a witness, I have to say something about this bad event. There was a red car who came from left, which is a wonderful car of "baoma". What's more,I like the car very much, while I dont like the driver. Because the driver ignored the red light above his head and went through the sidewalk quickly. Insides, I don't know the red whether speed up or not, while a motorbike came from right.Then, I would be like to say sorry for the bad thing happened. Finally, The time, I remembered I just looked at my watch, is 11:20 in the morning. People surrouded with them, and the driver and the girl who between in the motorbike was died. These just I know for this accident, I hope it will help you something.
