单词拼写做的很好，请注意积累词汇量；文中的句子基本没有错误，可适当将文中短句合并为长句；过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当，缺少组织，可适当增加连接词的使用；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开；连词使用偏少。
when it comes to a friend,i'd particularly like to talk about my best friend ...when it comes to a friend,i'd particularly like to talk about my best friend ...when it comes to a friend,i'd particularly like to talk about my best friend ...when it comes to a friend,i'd particularly like to talk about my best friend ...when it comes to a friend,i'd particularly like to talk about my best friend ...
