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作者词汇基础不错，在学术词汇的积累上还要再接再厉；作者有一定功底，可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆；文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词。
Small wonder,in judging from what is detailedly demonstrated in the above curve diagram,if we look hard enough,we can observe lucidly that it is with the growth of human population that the number of species has decreased rapidly in America and some species have even vanished from our planet. When seeing the not uncommon phenomenon,probably we have no better way to appreciate it than by exploring the three influential factors.In the first place,as the human population grows rapidly,a growing number of folks came to live where some wild species have been living.Therefore,these species have to move to other places.Correspondingly,some of them probably cannot adapt to the new environment and die.In the second place,although many citizens look on the wildlife as their friends,some inhabitants may not think so.They catch a lot of wild animals and sell them in order to get more money.Consequently,the natural balance and the ecologic environment are destroyed.In the third place,it is as the economy further develops and the procedure of the industrialization advances that the clear cutting has become increasingly serious.Hence,some of the wildlife become homeless and extinct. I would not make a big fuss however,in order to protect the wildlife,I have some suggestions.First,the authorities concerned should make laws to prevent them from being caught and killed.Second,the specialists should educate people to love nature and protect it.Third,I would not go that far,perhaps we should take practical actions to protect our living environment.Only in this way,have we no difficulty but can solve our issues effectively.
