SAT经典范文赏析

逃离伊朗 Escape from Iran
Kimi A. A final illustration that progress is not possible without sacrifice occurred in my own personal experience. My grandmother is one of the strongest women I know today. In her day, she sacrificed a tremendous amount for her family to be safe, secure, and happy. In the late 1970's, the revolution in Iran placed many people in a dangerous environment, many serving under harsh governmental forces, and others fleeing the country. My grandmother and her family, being one of those lucky families who could escape before time was no longer on their side. With hardships entering the U.S. and a small amount of money with her, my grandmother made the best of what she had, and became a successful lawyer in the United States. She raised her three children to become successful people themselves, not only in their careers, but also in their happiness as well. The sacrifice she made improved the lives of her children, grandchildren, and many generations yet to come.

点评：这段个人经历的信息量横扫全球。读Kimi的文章你会读到历史、文化和牺牲。句子的平行结构不错（如："she sacrificed a tremendous amount for her family to be safe, secure, and happy"),句式丰富，过渡巧妙。另外，这是她真实的经历，或者看起来是，不过在个人经历中加入一些编造的成分又有何妨？记住，作文就是亊实加虚构。再说一次，“想象力比知识更重要。”