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11. Teachers can make active adjustment of their teaching.老师们可以对于教学做出积极的调整。
12. Evaluation from students can， in a larger extent， contribute to the mutual understanding between teachers and students. 在更大程度上, 来自学生的评估可以有助于师生之间的互相理解。
13. I am not willing to deny the benefits brought about by co-workers’ remarks on teachers’ performance. 我不想否认由同事评价老师带来的利好。
14. Teachers might provide more professional suggestions on how to better the quality of education，after all，most teachers have accumulated a pool of teaching experiences and thus clearly know how to effectively establish a harmonious teacher-student relationship. 老师们也许会对于如何提高教学提出更加专业的建议，毕竟，大多数老师积累了丰富的教学经验也了解如何去和学生们建立和谐的师生关系。
15. For example，an experienced teacher can help green hand to manage their class activities effectively.例如，一个经验丰富的老师可以帮助新教师学习如何有效地管理课堂。
16. Some problems，however，might inevitably ensue. Some teachers may give negative comments on their co-workers simply because they have career competition with them. 然而，有些问题不可避免，有些老师可能会因为事业方面的竞争对同事做出负面的评价。
解析：Some problems，however，might inevitably ensue 一些问题不可避免地发生
17. Students should be allowed and encouraged to make comments on their teachers’ performance我们应该允许和鼓励学生们对于老师的教学做出评估。
18. It can perfect the quality of education and pave a new way for achieving equality between teachers and students. 这可以提高教学质量，同时，为实现师生的平等开辟了一条新的道路。
原创范文赏析：
首段：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
Traditionally, to respect educators and value education is considered as a kind of virtue of the students, however, many educationalists currently encourage learners to evaluate and criticize their teachers. This essay aims to prove that students should be allowed and motivated to comment on their teachers’ performance.
二段： 正方观点展开：支持学生评价老师的理由
Indeed, it is commendable for students to make comments on their teachers’ performance. Firstly, it will exert a beneficial influence on enhancing the quality of teaching by eliminating those less competent and less popular teachers. Meanwhile, the encouragement from students will greatly conduce to teachers’ passion. Hence, the desire to gain the praise of students could stimulate teachers’ motivation to excel professionally. Secondly, it is easy for teachers to timely receive students’ feedback so that they could adjust and optimize their teaching methods. Lastly, it can perfect the quality of education and pave a new way for achieving equality between teachers and students.
解析：excel professionally v教学上变得更加精通
解析：optimize their teaching method v改善他们的教学方法
三段：反方观点展开：反对学生评价老师的理由
Although the practice of evaluation of teachers is embraced by many people, still others remain suspicious of it merits. First, students may be not mature enough to make sound judgment upon their teachers’ academic performance. Conversely, some negative comments might be randomly made only because teachers’ hairstyle, appearance or clothes are not their favorite. Further, some students are more likely to make irresponsible comments on their teachers simply because they are blamed by their teachers, therefore, teachers will be hurt innocently. Eventually, youngsters may become more disrespectful and arrogant if they are encouraged to criticize and evaluate their teachers.
解析：make sound judgment upon sth 对于……做出理性判断
解析：may become more disrespectful and arrogant 也许会变得目无尊长和傲慢自大
尾段：再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)
In closing， evaluation of the teachers by high school students, whatever its merits and demerits would amount to a revolution in educational practice. However, the merits of this practice outweigh its downsides.
解析：amount to a revolution in educational practice v等同于教育的革命
解析：the merits of this practice outweigh its downsides 这种做法的利大于弊
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