2015年2月12日雅思写作解析及语料库
Some people think that the age limit for driving should be increased to make driving safer, do you agree or disagree? 为了提高驾驶安全,应该对司机的年龄有所限制,是否认同?
点评:2月12日雅思写作考察预测的重点提问:是否同意一种观点,为新题出现,在题库中最接近的考题为加大对于交通违规者的处罚力度是改善公路安全的最佳途径,是否认同?
写作难点:
1. 没有思路
2. 没有语言
3. 表达不精彩
解决策略:精彩的语料库的输入到输出
完美范文= 谋篇布局 + 遣词造句
写作步骤:
1. 词汇替换
2. 作家立场
3. 思路拓展
4. 正文写作
5. 仔细检查
背景解析:18岁以下不能考驾驶执照,65岁以上不能考驾驶执照, 这些人考完驾照,也是马路杀手,威胁到自己和他人的生命安全。
布局图:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点+ 作家立场
二段:第一次支持作家立场以及细节的展开
三段:第二次支持作家立场以及细节的展开
四段:让步反方观点的合理性 +加以反驳
尾段:总结作家立场
原创范文赏析:
首段:背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场
Alarmingly, the incidence of traffic accident keeps on soaring at a startling rate, one of the reasons can be largely owed to unsafe driving. Under this circumstance, an opinion springs up that stricter limitation should be implemented to regulate the age of drivers. I agree with this proposal.
解析: incidence n发生的机率
解析: unsafe = insecure adj 不安全的
拓展: perilous = risky = dangerous adj 危险的
拓展: be implemented = be carried out v 被执行
二段:第一次支持作家立场
First, safe driving is indeed vital for both drivers and pedestrians. An experienced and highly skillful driver usually needs long training and practice. In this sense, drivers who are under the age of 18, in most cases, fail to have sufficient time to perfect their driving techniques. Meanwhile, young drivers sometimes like to take a risk to savor the excitement of driving, thereby, they are more likely to cause more traffic accidents, which will not only agonize the victims but also ruin the young drivers’ own future. The debate reminds me of a story, a teenage driver illegally drove his father car during the rush hours, unsurprisingly, he knocked down a old man. He had no choice but to face the severe penalty of the law.
解析:ruin the young drivers’ own future v 自毁前程
解析:pedestrians n行人
拓展:agonize the victims = afflicts the sufferers v给受害者带来痛苦
拓展:are more likely to do sth = are prone to do sth = tend to do sth v易于做……
三段:第二次支持作家立场:
Also,the stricter age limitation for drivers is especially suitable for those senior drivers. Although senior drivers might be adept at driving a car,their energy,eyesight,reaction ability sometimes cannot make them cope with some unexpected traffic conditions. Once tragedy occur happens, nothing can be done to compensate for the price of life. In order to ensure the security of driving, prevention is better than cure, therefore, to carry out age limitation among drivers is quite preferable and feasible.
拓展:safety =security n 安全
解析:prevention is better than cure 预防胜过治疗
解析:is quite preferable and feasible 做……是十分可取的可行的
解析:traffic conditions n 交通状况
四段:谈及不同意的意见 + 再加以反驳
Some people might remain skeptical about my stand. One argument might be hold by some people is that the right of steering a car should not be deprived no matter how young or old one driver might be. Otherwise, this new regulation might dampen one’s interest of driving a car or create real inconvenience for some old people. Still, some people might argue that the sale of automobile industry might suffer from downturn if the new law of regulating the age of drivers is enacted and popularized. What I want to rebut, however, is that we have no reason to ignore the potential threat triggered by perilous driving. Therefore, to limit age of drivers is a feasible option.
解析:create real inconvenience for sb 给……造成了真正的不便
解析:dampen one’s interest of 打消了某人做……的热情
解析:What I want to rebut, however, is that …… 但是,我想要反驳的是……
解析:a feasible option 是可行的选择
尾段:总结观点
Overall, I re-affirm my conviction that life tops all. In light of this, it is a commendable approach to strictly limit the age of drivers. This wise strategy will benefit the drivers and the pedestrians.
拓展:in this sense = in light of this statement 基于这种说法
解析:Life tops all 生命最重要
解析:it is a commendable approach to do sth 做……是值得推荐的方法
写作感言:本文用时15分钟,VIP教学现场打字完成,体现自由写作的状态。本文立场鲜明,思维辩证,摒弃模板,文风朴素,用词精准,词汇丰富,建议童鞋学习文章的布局图,背诵语料库中的精彩的衔接词汇和固定表达法。2月14日和2月28日雅思写作预测题目依然以热题和母题为主。
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