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假设美国某中学的学生明天来你校访问交流，主题是高中生对文，理科的选择。请你用英语写一篇发言稿，向他们介绍你所做的选择，并说明选择的理由。
注意：
1.开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数；
2.词数120左右；
3.短文中不能出现与本人相关的信息。
参考词汇：文科 arts；理科 science
Good afternoon, everyone.
Welcome to our school !_______________________________________
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Thanks!
【命题导向概述】
自2008年以来，安徽高考英语卷书面表达一直保持着开放式话题作文的风格。其基本的特点是：真实性，考生有话可说；抽象性，促进自由发挥；大众性，杜绝城乡差别。
然而，本次书面表达的命题也存在美中不足之处。本次命题虽然从形式上表现出足够开放的特点，但实际上该话题表现出来的更多是“陈旧性”和“纯记录性”。首先，文理分科离考生写作时刻至少一两年的时间，所以大部分考生只能够竭力去回忆当时的情形而做出粗略的叙述，无形中限制了学生的想象力和创造力。其次，文理科选择的原因分析对于未成年的高中生来说本来就很局限，能想到的基本都是“兴趣与擅长因素”，“父母与家长因素”以及“就业与工作因素”，他们很难理解文理分科对于人的思维培养，性格塑造等长远性、实质性的意义；也就是说，考生写作内容上的雷同性太强。甚至，不少学生当年选科时都没能成为自己的主人，写作起来更是力不从心。
因此，阅卷中便只能把语言因素作为直接评判的标准，而很大程度上忽略了思想和内容因素。部分地制约了书面表达考察的全面性。
【命题人范文参考与评析】
命题人范文:
Good afternoon, everyone.
Welcome to our school! High school students are faced with a choice between arts and science. It was not an easy choice for me to make. After careful consideration, though, I decided on science as my main subject of study. The reasons are as follows.
First, science graduates are in greater demand than arts ones in China. Second, the science major can help me achieve my childhood dream of becoming a scientist. Third, my parents wish me to study science at college because they believe I will have a brighter future as a science student. Last but not least, my physics teacher is my role model, whose influence on me had a lot to do with my decision.
It is for these reasons that I finally made my choice.
Thanks!
范文评析：
这篇文章给读者整体的感觉是主旨明确，结构清晰，语言流畅。虽然文章中并没有用到华丽的词汇和复杂的结构，却能让读者感到一种很低调的文雅。实事求是地说，在某些部分的思想表述方面，有的考生用到了比这篇范文中更加具有吸引力的词汇，表现出了一种令人赞赏的美感。然而与学生作文相比，有一个细节之处尤其体现出本文作者语言功底的扎实：那就是时态的运用。文章中只有三个句子用到了过去时（范文中粗体部分），通过时态的轻松一变，作者将描述的场景自然地拉到了自己的从前--即选科的那个时刻。在一篇以现在时间为主体的演讲稿中，能够如此熟练而又精确地处理时间关系，这对于一名高中生来说，实在是值得高度赞赏。因此，作为高考的英语作文来说，这篇文章能拿到满分是无疑的。
然而，任何事物都不尽完美。这篇文章的不足之处在于：首先，命题中非常明确地提出这是一篇演讲稿，因此，说话人在给听众打完招呼（welcome to our school）之后并没有告诉听众今天演讲的主题，而是直接进行事实的陈述： High school students are faced with a choice between arts and science. 这让人感觉非常唐突。其次，文章中作者对于自己选择理科的理由说了四点，看起来似乎非常充分，然而读起来却让人感觉相互之间没有任何的互通性，有零散材料的堆砌之嫌。因此，笔者建议，与其这样逐点堆砌，不如将一两个重点的原因充分论述。另外，如果再对演讲文稿做思想情感上的要求，那本篇文章也没有作者高尚精神和情操的任何体现。毕竟，一篇好文章应该是“真善美”的体现，而对于读者来说最直观的特点就是：我读完了，我还想再读。综合以上分析，笔者给出一篇稍作改进的欣赏版范文，供学有余力的学习者参考。
【欣赏版范文参考】
Good afternoon, everyone.
Welcome to our school! I feel extremely honored here, on behalf of all the students in our school, to address you guests from America, sharing with you my experience of choosing the main subject between science and arts.
It was one and a half years ago, after much consideration and systematic analysis, that I decided to steer my boat toward the sea of science, however rough it may be ahead. Science, where all human knowledge about nature comes and pools, stands for not only the crystal of human wisdom, but also the keen desire of humans to conquer the nature. Then, from a more practical perspective, I hold firmly the belief that it is science and technology that has made our world what she is now. Therefore, for a better China and a better world, I do feel obliged to do my bit in the future to promote the development of science around the world.
Dear friends, choice is a right, choice is a luxury and choice is, above all, a responsibility. Bear all these words in your mind, and you will find yours is also a wise choice.
So much for my speech. Thank you!
