例如：

　　1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity。

　　Better: Charity has supported the organization。

　　2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate。

　　Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate。

　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。

　　例如：

　　1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk。

　　Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk。

　　2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations。

　　Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation。

　　3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire。

　　4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores。

　　Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores。

　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。

　　例如：

　　1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form。

　　Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals。

　　2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall。

　　Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall。